New Piece! Tear Me Apart!!!!!

[iloveblackpepper]

this is a new piece I started yesterday. its called "5678", and is basically about dance and dance performance. tell me what you think so far!



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[Toon]

Like it alot, not sure about the pixelated part but the rest is spot on

[LaurenMarie]

It's definitely an interesting image. I like the colors and you've portrayed a great sense of motion. But unless you said it was about dance, I wouldn't have known that. But then again, maybe I'm not your target market and this poster would make sense in a modern dance studio. I've only done Egyptian Classical and some ballroom myself. But sandals? I don't think people can dance well in flip flops! Lyricals, yes, flip flops, no

It seems a little heavy to the right, like it would tip over if it could. It needs something to balance it in the upper left corner. Also, I would try making it a more asymmetrical composition. It looks like the guy should be right in the center, but because of the rest of the elements, he optically appears to not be in the center, but only slightly off, so it looks like a mistake. I don't know that you need the white silhouettes either. Check out this tutorial from Veerle. It looks like your piece was kind of inspired by her work.

[brokendalek]

I like it a lot, love the colours, the images, the sharpness. Not so sure about the numbers in the background though...very nice indeed

[LaurenMarie]

I think I understand the numbers. It's a count off to starting the routine. It made sense to me, but then again, I have some experience in that area.

[brokendalek]

Originally Posted by LaurenMarie

I think I understand the numbers. It's a count off to starting the routine. It made sense to me, but then again, I have some experience in that area.

That's entirely logical when it's explained - I have two left feet!

[iloveblackpepper]

Oh, I didnt even try aligning the elements to the center yet, because it might shift one way or another once I work on it a little further. I want to add some things, and maybe take away some of the lines coming from behind the numbers. The pixelated BG was just somthing new. Im used to just using a plain gradient as a BG, but I wanted to try something new.

A friend of mine said it was too busy. You guys thing so? Because I want to add a pair of sneakers, and play with the 5678 motif a little more.

[Toon]

I don't think it's busy, I think it draws you to the center quite well.

[LaurenMarie]

It's not busy in a distracting way, more in an interesting way.

[brokendalek]

Originally Posted by LaurenMarie

It's not busy in a distracting way, more in an interesting way.

I agree