While I'm not willing to watch the movie simply to inform my comments here (it's doubtful there's been a "critique" on this forum in the robust sense that it ideally implies) there's a valid perspective to be offered. I find there is value in having a comment or critique from someone totally unfamiliar with the context of a work. It would be foolish to only seek responses from people that understand your context (which is totally reverse to one of the biggest movements in design around the world today, design from the end-user's perspective. A movie poster also faces an end-user).
One of the poster's strengths in my opinion is the ability to create something iconc, something instantaneous, to lodge emotion mood and space into one frame. Ultimatly, something so powerful it burns into the viewer's psychi. That's not what is happening in your creative half hour of work. At a half hour it is a start though (as i suspected). As a couple overt points i'll say: The fade-blending of assets appears plastic and cheap, the placement of text feels lost because it creates excessively complex geometry that exacerbates the assets' weak composition; The title's placement comes across as being used to "patch" (hide) the conversion of assets at the center.
While i appreciate the multi-lingual nature of any forum, and even daily living as globalization makes it's presence felt more and more, people of an industry need to be able to speak that industry. I use various terms, analogies, and concepts to explain ideas or reasoning in a way that other educated/skillful designers - or creative types for that matter - should understand. With that said, there is a truly inherent challenge in written critiques that face-to-face transcends. If you're first language is not english I appreciate your effort to come on board to an english forum and share here.
I'm currently working on a film poster myself. It's a short movie 100% done in Montreal. If i create a thread for the posting my process i hope you chime in. I also hope you continue posting updates to the creative work in this thread. Lastly i TOTALLY know what you mean about lack of useful information in forum "critiques", the inspiration behind my comment before. A good critique can take a huge amount of energy which a lot of people aren't willing to do often.
I'm not familiar with rubys or stat, i wikipedia'd the later, interesting! I hope it's more clear why i think your composition is too loose, lacks a sense concreteness, is lost.
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