Your composition is very lost. Remove the text for starters, and examine the graphic elements. I find the piece fairly derivative, look for ways to infuse the design with life. Would i notice that poster if i were flipping through a catalog of hundreds, or walking down a poster hall? No. It looks like you've been resourceful with your assets but i'd recommend to use a camera and collect your own assets. You'll have high resolution assets across all items, matching style, and the choice of your framing for each asset.
I think you should view this above work as a starting point, a sketch. Speaking of sketching, did you do anything on paper before moving to the computer?
Best of luck. Cheers
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